INT. GORDON CROWES' TRUCK - AFTERNOON
SUPERIMPOSE: CHISAGO, MN
18 year old BENJAMIN CROWE, sits in the passenger seat
playing a PSP while his father GORDON drives the truck.
Ben rapidly press some buttons before turning the PSP off in
frustration.
BENJAMIN CROWE
Ya know, I get that you and Jim
used to be partners and you don't
get to see each other that much
since you retired. But, why does
that mean I have to be dragged into
it too? I mean, what am I supposed
to do, hang out with Sarah all
weekend?
GORDON CROWE
You know damn well I'm not gonna
leave you home alone after the
stunt you pulled at graduation, and
what's so wrong with Sarah? You two
used to be best friends.
BENJAMIN CROWE
Yeah, until she hit puberty, grew
tits and became a total bitch.
GORDON CROWE
Hey, watch the language! And...
she's not that bad.
BENJAMIN CROWE
Maybe not to you.
GORDON CROWE
Well, nobody said you had to hang
out with her. Just do what you do
at home. Just sit in front of the
TV all day.
EXT. JIM HAWKINS' CABIN - AFTERNOON
The truck pulls to a stop and the two get out and instantly
begin stretching their legs.
A few seconds later JIM HAWKINS comes bursting out of the
cabin with a huge smile on his face and three bottles of beer
in his hands.
JIM HAWKINS
I was starting to think you boys
got lost or something!
GORDON CROWE
Nah, just got a late start is all.
Jim and Gordon embrace in a hug.
JIM HAWKINS
Damn is it good to see you again!
GORDON CROWE
It's been too long, hasn't it?
JIM HAWKINS
Damn right it has.
(he finally notices Ben)
Damn kid, the last time I saw you,
you weren't more than just skin and
bones. What the hell kinda steroids
you been taking? I wanna get Kyle
on'em while he's still young.
BENJAMIN CROWE
My baseball coach had me on this
weight gaining diet thing all last
summer.
GORDON CROWE
(beaming with pride)
Put on forty-five pounds.
JIM HAWKINS
Well shit I'll drink to that.
Jim hands Gordon and Ben each a beer, but Gordon quickly
snatches Ben's away from him.
GORDON CROWE
(to Jim)
What are you doing, he's only
eighteen?
Jim laughs until he realizes that Gordon's being serious.
JIM HAWKINS
Oh come on Gordy, when we were his
age we were doing things a whole
lot worse than drinking one beer,
besides he isn't even half as wild
as we were in our day.
GORDON CROWE
(handing the beer to Ben)
I guess one beer isn't gonna hurt
anything.
Ben opens the beer and takes a drink with a smile as Jim
gives him a wink.
JIM HAWKINS
(to Ben)
The kids are out on the dock. Why
don't you go on back and say hello?
EXT. JIM HAWKINS' CABIN DOCK - AFTERNOON
Ben gets to the end of the dock to find 19 year old SARAH
HAWKINS layed out on her stomach in a skimpy blue and white
bikini while her 10 year old brother KYLE casts his fishing
reel.
Sarah feels the dock shaking and wakes up as Ben gets closer.
She sees who it is and lets out a disappointed sigh.
SARAH HAWKINS
Damn, when you guys didn't show up
yesterday I started thinking you
weren't gonna come at all.
Ben just ignores her.
BENJAMIN CROWE
(to Kyle)
Hey, little man, how's it going?
Kyle is excited to see Ben.
KYLE HAWKINS
Hey, Ben. Are we going now?
BENJAMIN CROWE
Going where?
SARAH HAWKINS
Our Dad promised him you'd take us
out on the boat so he can fish.
Sarah gets up and tosses her towel in the boat.
BENJAMIN CROWE
Since when do you fish?
Sarah looks at Ben with the utmost disgust as if what she's
about to say is common knowledge.
SARAH HAWKINS
I don't, but all the trees make it
impossible to get a decent tan.
Ben is about to respond when the dock starts shaking.
He turns to see Jim carrying a cooler with Gordon right
behind him carrying life jackets.
JIM HAWKINS
You kids just about ready to ship
off?
BENJAMIN CROWE
Uh, yeah, I guess.
JIM HAWKINS
Good, good I packed you guys a
little cooler in case you get
hungry, or thirsty.
Jim gives Ben a little wink that Gordon doesn't catch before
lifting the cooler into the back of the boat.
GORDON CROWE
(while handing Ben a cell
phone)
You be careful out there and call
us if anything happens.
BENJAMIN CROWE
(slightly confused)
What could happen?
GORDON CROWE
I don't know, anything. It's just
in case.
Ben climbs into the boat shaking his head in confusion.
JIM HAWKINS
Looks like you kids are good to go.
Ben starts up the boat's engine as Jim and Gordon head back
for the cabin.
Ben pulls the boat away from the dock and out into the open
water passing two YOUNG GIRLS in a paddle boat.
When the paddle boat is behind them we see it start to shake
and tip before it completely flips over and the girls are
pulled under.
COMMENTARY: Well, that went on a bit longer than I had planned on but apart from some shitty dialogue I think it worked out okay. It's funny cause I started writing the "treatment" for this thing a while back but didn't notice all the "clever" name homages until I started turning it into screenplay form. I'm not gonna point them all out cause I feel stupid for putting that many in one chapter but feel free to point them out in the comments section.
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